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As i moved to the side to get my tray with my food i went to a nice table with 4 chairs even tho i was eatin by myself. I was watching other people while i was eating listening to converstations like a realty show. then i turned to my left and saw a man far in the back he looked wicked but i felt something but coudn't explain it.we locked eyes he staring into mine me starring to his dark brown eyes. what a creep i said to myself he made a twisted face like he can read my thoughts. I picked up my tray threw away my trash when I looked up there he was the guy who was staring at me "Hi young lady" he smiled" Ummm hhhii" i sturrtered "what a lovely day he said whiping his hands with a napkin. "it's ok I" I grinned o please excuse me weres my manners he cleared his throat my name is chase he took my hand and kissed my palm a little mark begin to form.. I felt my face rush red, are you ok my dear do you need to rest here ill take you home. I nodded my head gazing in his eyes who is this guy why is he being so nice to me. As he held my hand taking me to his car why coudn't I move it was like i was being controlled. He openened the penger side for me come on we cant burn day light he smiled I walked inside no matter what i told myself not to go i coudnt control my legs. He started the engine and the last thing i saw was the mcdonalds sign disappering the farther we got from it. He parked right in the my drive way that hasnt been used in years. He opened my door lets go my princess he whispered. grabbing my hand once again i followed him to my porch he was able to get the keys from pocket even tho i never seen his hands move. He unlocked my front door skittles was on a barking rampage from the intrudore entering our house to bad skittles was in the kennl that means he unable to hurt the stranger. He picked me up and walked me all the way up to my room. The stairs squaked with each step he took was in the hallway made a right and there he was in my room he walked me inside and put me gentely on the bed. and closed the door. I closed my eyes and prayed Lord im sorry for my sins please proctect me give me strength, when I opened my eyes there he was on my bed sitting right next to me he kissed me on the cheek and whispered in my ear I never knew you would be so beauatiful he bent my head back and I felt a flash of pain in my neck. I never been bite before as I felt my head throb This is it im dying i will never be able to kiss james at least I would be able to see my mom. As he pulled those venom teeth out my neck he put me gently on my bed as my throat was dry i was trying to speak while the tears rolling down my check i can taste the salty tears. He kissed my forhead and disapperad and i faded in the darkness.